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19 November 2010 @ 11:05 am
[ISHIHIME FIC] "Without Melody"  
Title: Without Melody
Author: chiave_trust, aka me
Rating: G
Warnings: Aiming for the general feel of the latest chapters. Also, short.
Note 1: For the IshiHime birthday contest 2010.
Note 2: lyrics (in italics) taken from Snow Patrol's "Set the Fire to the Third Bar".


The same piano, over and over again - as if there was no other music in the world.

The same routine, over and over again, as if there was nothing else.

There is no peace that I've found so far.

She could feel something, something off - as if the piano hit a flat key when it was supposed to be glorious sound, glorious pink and orange orchestra playing for and throughout the world.

Orihime looked up at the sky, and cried without remembering why.

Ishida Uryuu's pencil broke, the kanji half-finished in an answer to a practice question for an exam.

Dutifully he changed out the graphite in the pencil, erased the kanji, and started again.

A scratch in the record.

School would have exams soon, and he wanted to be ready. Wanted to be prepared.

He would show them, he would show them all, but -

He couldn't remember. There was something at the tip of his memory, like information from a lecture long ago, but it wasn't a lecture. He remembered a panicked voice calling for help. He remembered pain.

Discordant memories, an ocean of them.

But whenever he saw her in the school corridors, music returned -

- if only for a moment.
enisy: Bleach:: Orihime (Everybody Else's Girl)enisy on November 19th, 2010 06:15 pm (UTC)
I like! You adhered to your chosen theme faithfully throughout the story (even just with stray words and phrases like "scratch in the record" and "discordant" in Ishida's case), and I found the juxtaposition of Orihime and Ishida's situations very evocative. <3
Kit-chan: crack for ficondemandchiave_trust on November 19th, 2010 06:29 pm (UTC)
Aw, thank you! I do online DJ work so music has been on my mind lately. <3
_debbiechan__debbiechan_ on November 19th, 2010 07:11 pm (UTC)

So lovely. Your pieces are always like poems and this one fits them so well. Thank you so much for posting it. Funny that I've been on the tail end of a migraine for a couple days now and it's been lifting--I felt it going away as I was reading this. XD
Kit-chan: a bit odd you knowchiave_trust on November 20th, 2010 02:21 am (UTC)
Awwww! Thank YOU for helping me getting back into writing again - I literally hadn't written in months before I wrote this o.o
peca_06peca_06 on November 19th, 2010 07:40 pm (UTC)
Pretty *__*, very poetic <3
Kit-chan: my dork senses are tinglingchiave_trust on November 20th, 2010 02:21 am (UTC)
Thank you! I was listening to "Set the Fire to the Third Bar" by Snow Patrol (hence the quote) when I wrote this. I think it helps XD
loverofstoriesloverofstories on November 19th, 2010 08:54 pm (UTC)
Very nice. I love your imagery/descriptive language <3
Kit-chan: i'm not worthychiave_trust on November 20th, 2010 02:23 am (UTC)
I was trying not to emulate a previous (2008) piece of mine, and I think I did well. Thank you for the comment too - I'm always concerned about how I do...
loverofstoriesloverofstories on November 21st, 2010 06:48 am (UTC)
Hmm, I wanna read the 2008 piece too now. Can you give me a link?

And you're welcome ^^
Kit-chan: i'm not worthychiave_trust on November 21st, 2010 03:45 pm (UTC)
It's a bit dark, so the rating on this one is on that line between PG-13 and R:

Sweet Dreams, from 2008.
Alexa-chanalexaclyne on November 20th, 2010 12:37 am (UTC)
Very nicely written, I like it~
Kit-chan: i'm not worthychiave_trust on November 20th, 2010 02:23 am (UTC)
Thank you XD